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什么是真正的托福满分作文?(内附童姥独立写作机经满分示范)

2016-09-19 18:23 From 张艳

童姥以一篇常考的教育类独立写作机经题目,为大家呈现一篇完整满分范文及其写作思路

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: 

All university students should be required to take basic science courses even if it is not the field of their study.

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开头段的万能写法之一就是

由抽象到具象,话题由大到小

这样能保证第一句背景句和文章主题直接相关,后面推进就顺其自然了。

University education has been long taken as elite education where students can take four-year-time to delve deeper into subjects they are majored or interested in and become experts in respective fields. However, it is also advocated that university education has developed gradually toward mass education. Therefore, when it comes to whether all undergraduates should be required to take basic science courses, people may take different standpoints. I myself prefer the idea that taking basic science courses should not be a requirement for all university students.

比如这里第一句以讲大学教育的作用来开头,用转折道出大学教育似乎开始往大众教育方向发展这一现象,往后自然而然的引出了与此相关的一个有争议的问题(即本题题目)最后顺理成章的提出了的观点——不赞同。

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接下来分3段开始论证。

首先,教育类话题我们往往可以确定两大论证方向:学生学校”,

再仔细分析题目,找准具体的切入点。

并且,注意展开时候的逻辑!

For one thing, the whole reason of elective system in universities is to entitle students the rights and opportunities to choose courses that are relevant to their majors and those they are interested in. Basic science courses might be highly relevant and recommendable for students whose majors are science-related, whereas students majored in humanities, communication or fine arts may find taking science courses not that helpful in the fields they specialize in. So it is more advisable for undergraduates to choose courses in accordance with their own needs and preferences.

☞从个人兴趣入手:
大学的选课系统是为了让学生们选择与自己专业相关或自己感兴趣的课程。因此,
basic science不一定是所有学生都喜爱的。

 



For another, while selecting courses, factors like whether those courses would be informative and enlightening, or whether those courses would help them with their future career choices would all be taken into consideration. Obviously, science-related jobs are not always listed as first priorities for newly graduates. Taking myself as an example, I majored in English language and literature. When I start hunting jobs, I would prefer positions like English teachers, translators, editors and alike, all of which do not need science skills at all. So taking basic science courses would probably be of little use to me, and also to many students like me.


☞从职业发展入手:
选课时需考虑的一大因素是该课程是否对学生的未来职业有帮助。论述时只需用
的一个例子,就能由小及大,清楚阐明观点。



Admittedly, it is beyond doubt that basic science courses are useful for many undergraduates. It is just not all majors and all jobs are overlapping in science aspects, so those courses would not be equally beneficial or helpful for all students. With limited time and energy, students should be advised to make reasonable arrangement of time and choose courses that they can benefit most.

☞从大学教育入手:
这段俗称让步段,是我们写作中很好用也很爱用的一种写法。


但这里要【
注意】:
让步段不能光说虽然
A好但是B更好,中间需要适当加入一些细节,以免看起来像是车轱辘话来回说。


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结尾段简单收尾即可,但是需注意遣词造句,尽量不要用之前开头段阐明观点时用过的句子。

From what I have discussed above, we may easily come to the conclusion that asking all university students to take basic science courses is not a feasible or favorable scheme.

最后,童姥总结一些写作中常见问题:

写作一定不是拼字数。

童老师每次的大作文的字数都在350-420之间,从没高过450,但分数也从没低于28

因此,字数只需达到基本要求,语言表达和逻辑论证才是最重要的考量对象。

所以,同学们上写作课并不是要学习把句子写复杂,把段落拉长,而是要学习如何做到有理有据言之有物