雅思写作：头脑风暴和段落逻辑展开

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辩论性题目的逻辑展开：

头脑风暴

Brainstorm

涉及哪些人

学生，老师，学校

评价老师的好处

提高学生的判断，决定能力，对今后有好处

鼓励老师提高教学水平

整体教学质量提高

评价老师的坏处：

评估可能不公平，学生不负责任

学生给出恶毒的评价，报复

学生给老师低的评价是别的原因

四段式：

评价好：

1.       提高教师讲课质量

2.       培养学生能力

评价老师不好：

1.       不负责，不认真，评价不严格。

2.       学生给出恶毒评价，打击老师。

五段式：

评价老师好：

1.       提高教学质量

2.       培养学生能力

评价老师不好：

学生可能不认真，也可能故意给出恶毒评价，报复老师。然而，这些问题都可以避免。例如，学校可以给出详细指导并严格监管评估过程。此外适当惩罚故意给出恶意评价的同学。

写出一个简洁的开头段

背景+双方观点+自己的观点

背景+对方观点+自己的观点

背景+某种观点有争议+自己观点

例子一：

Education plays an increasingly important role in one’s life. Teachers’ performance is especially crucial in this process, which can decide if students can successfully complete their education. Whether students should be allowed to evaluate their teachers is an issue in debate. In my view, this practice is beneficial for both students and teachers and thus should be supported.

例子二：

Education plays an increasingly important role in one’s life. Teachers’ performance is especially crucial in this process, which can decide if students can successfully complete their education. Some people suggest that students should be allowed to evaluate their teachers, while others are concerned that this will cause disrespect and indiscipline. From my perspective, this practice brings more benefits than drawbacks and should be supported.

例子三：

Teachers play an indispensable role in students’ education process. Therefore, some people suggest that students should be allowed to evaluate their teachers’ job performance to ensure the quality of teaching. However, others argue that this may cause disrespect and indiscipline. It is my personal belief that students should be permitted to do so.

段落展开的方式：

给出主题句，接着具体解释。

l  解释的时候可以把概述的词汇具体化，举例子，正面假设，反面假设。

l  中间可以根据意思添加合适的关联词。但是也不用隔两句都加。例如可以加：to be specific, generally speaking, besides, moreover, as a result, consequently, therefore, however, nonetheless, for instance等等。

l  在文章段落里可以尝试加：主语从句，非限定定语从句， 表示“既，又”的并列连词，分词表示结果等，使句子复杂化。

l  然后说一下做这些事能产生的结果作为总结。

l  一定要记住，要用自己的语言，像给别人讲道理一样，说明白一件事。追求观点独特，新奇是好的，也是应该鼓励的，但是不是必须的。一定要看自己的语言是否能驾驭。

四段式主体段：

It is evident that allowing students to evaluate their teachers have positive effects on both students and teachers. Firstly, teachers can gain feedback from students about the strengths and weaknesses of their lectures. Based on this information, they can adjust their teaching plans and improve their lectures to satisfy the needs of students at different proficiency level. As a result, students can have better academic performance. Without such input, teachers may not realize their problems and may not be able to help students effectively. Also, positive feedback is encouragement and motivation for teachers. Secondly, students’ critical thinking and decision-making ability can also be nurtured/fostered/cultivated accordingly, which are essential in their future study and work. Students have to attend the lectures carefully before they can give accurate evaluation. In this way, they not only need to think critically but also make their own decisions about how the teachers perform.

However, it might also be noted that this practice may lead to loss of respect and discipline. If the evaluation is not well-managed, students may not give in their assessment responsibly. Some students even do not read the instructions and give comments mindlessly. Besides, students may give mean or unfair comments not because their teachers have poor performance but because they dislike schooling or the person instead. They regard the evaluation process as a chance to revenge their teachers. Nevertheless, these problems can be solved if the process is administered more strictly.

结尾段：

In summing up, although this practice may have potential drawbacks, it brings many benefits to both teachers and students. It improves teaching quality and students’ ability. Therefore, it is advisable to allow or even encourage students to assess teachers’ job performance.

五段式：

(Crystal clear is that) To start with, allowing students to evaluate their teachers motivates teachers to improve the quality of their teaching. They can gain feedback from students about the strengths and weaknesses of their lectures. Based on this information, they can adjust their teaching plans and improve their lectures to satisfy the needs of students at different proficiency level. As a result, students can have better academic performance. Without such input, teachers may not realize their problems and may not be able to help students effectively. Also, positive feedback is encouragement and motivation for teachers.

Moreover, students’ critical thinking and decision-making ability can also be nurtured/fostered/cultivated accordingly, which are essential in their future study and work. Students have to attend the lectures carefully before they can give accurate evaluation. In this way, they not only need to think critically but also make their own decisions about how the teachers perform.

However, it might also be noted that this practice may lead to loss of respect and discipline. If the evaluation is not well-managed, students may not give in their assessment responsibly. Some students even do not read the instructions and give comments mindlessly. Besides, students may give mean or unfair comments not because their teachers have poor performance but because they dislike schooling or the person instead. They regard the evaluation process as a chance to revenge their teachers. Nevertheless, these problems can be solved if the process is administered more strictly.

结尾段：

In summing up, although this practice may have potential drawbacks, it brings many benefits to both teachers and students. It improves teaching quality and students’ ability. Therefore, it is advisable to allow or even encourage students to assess teachers’ job performance.

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